wie der Titel schon sagt bitte ich euch um dringende hilfe bei der korrektur eines englisch referates
ich geh momentan in die 13 klasse und muss für englisch noch etwas präsentieren und das auch abgeben ,dabei wird auf alles geachet
(inhalt +grammatik) ich bin wirklich sehr schlecht in englisch und hoffe mit euerer hilfe das ich daraus viele punkte raushollen kann um meine note zu verbessern
Vielen dank im voraus
Bei diesen aufgaben handelt es sich alles um diesen text
1.) What objective facts do youlearn about the author's life?
The author has become an actor. She has the acting discovereal in the school itself. He discribe's that she is the only Mexican were dislikes the mexican food. they love the theather. Becouse of this he lost much of friends. He loves Shakespear and the do any party with the design of Shakespear or he durings car rides or dinner parties.His normal friends don't exapt that she is adrama queen. Becouse of this hef ound new friends because thayaccept him as it is . The author feel more comfortable in then own skin by the new group.He is a theaher freak whose friends are quiet and non comfortable.They spend her time with girl ''who lunch''.
2.) Outline what she says about her emotinal life!
The author says about her emotinal life that she was very lonley as they say that she is a drama queen .his friends deserted him becouse he is not a normal guy. His friends don't accept his theatrical tendencies. he loves shakespeare.In the high-school they begon a new life.He found a new group ,they accepted him as it is.he fell more comfortable in her new own skin.But the important thing is that she found herself.
3.)Analyse language and style of the article!
In the text that writen by Jasmin C. ,, A Shakespear-Prep'' is about a guy who find herself and begann a new life.
The author of this use lots of chiasmss ,, i am (line(l) 1.f) and ,,i am (l.2).
In (l.2) they us a similie,an explicitcomparisson between two distinctly different things whichhave at least one feature in common ,, as night and day''. At the next paragraph the use a alliteration,a recurrence of initial sounds.The authors effect of the aliterations to convey auditory images.
At (l 15-27) the author use much of chiasms. The effect of this are that he discribes only one person and that the person stand in the center.
4.)Literature like Shakespeare's dramas may contributeto your personal development -discuss-!
Shakespeare is one of the first great dramatists.Although his works has survived incomplete, thanks to him some of the big trogedies of histor. he was active in all literary genres. Particulory his romatic tragedies (romeo and julia) and his comedies are very exciting, the story takes places (king lear) givean interesting insight into the living conditions read at the courtin the time of Shakespeare.His really impressed me was how it manuges Shakespeare historical material (the drama king) pocked in great poetry. in i see the first writer who is not satisfied with a de*****ion of the unavoible people but also the examination of the emotinal lives of his characters.
Shakespeare language is strange even for the englisch of his days but then again the most s*****s we have today are recreations based on memorys of actors and the audience , but tis fact doesn't really want to appear as an excuse in my mind it even lets the shakespeare ''fans'' who're always quoting his crap seem rather ridicoulous becouse they actuelley gabble some words that probably never ever left shakespearmouth
He wasn't able to write his name properly and left out the second. Theexcuse for his curiosity still be the instability of the englisch language that days but i expect move of a wonnable gennious of language and poesy .
mal ganz ehrlich, hast du dir deinen Text eigentlich ein 2. Mal durchgelesen? Zumindest die Tippfehler lassen sich, egal wie gut man in Englisch ist, sicherlich vermeiden wenn man seine texte Korrektur ließt.
Da ich mir gerade nicht den ganzen Infotext der Website durchlesen will, kann ich dir, was die inhaltlichen Fehler anbelangt, nicht helfen - aber ich lese mir deinen text einmal durch!
1.) What objective facts do youlearn about the author's life?
The author has become an actor. She has the acting discovereal in the school itself. -weiß nicht genau was du hier meinst, aber vielleicht ist das besser- She discovered her attitude to acting during her schooltime.
He discribe's that she is the only Mexican who dislikes the mexican food. They love the theater [AM]. Becauseof this he lost many friends.
He loves Shakespear and the do any party with the design of Shakespear or he durings car rides or dinner parties. - was willst du damit sagen? Dass Sie alle Handlungen unter ein Shakespear Motto gestellt haben?
His normal friends don't [COLOR="red"]except = ausser / accept = akzeptieren/COLOR]that she is a drama queen.
Du wechselst oft zwischen ER und SIE herum!! Undedingt korrigieren!!
Because of this he found new friends because thayaccept him as it is.
But because of that reason he found new friends who accept him as he is.
The author feel more comfortable in then own skin by the new group.
The author felt more comfortable when he belong to the new group.
He is a theaher freak whose friends are quiet and non comfortable. They spend her time with girl ''who lunch''. - keine Ahnung was du damit sagen willst
2. Text:
Ich habe den "A Shakespearean Prep" text kurz überflogen. Dieser ist ziemlich geschlechterneutral geschrieben, ich nehme (vor Allem wegen des Bildes rechts oben) trotzdem einmal an, die handelnde Person ist weiblich, du änderst das Geschlecht nämlich von Satz zu Satz!
2.) Outline what she says about her emotinal life!
The author says about her emotinal life that she felt very lonley in the time she was seen as a drama queen. Her friends deserted her because she is not a normal girl. Her friends don't accept her theatrical tendencies as for example she adores shakespeare. In high-school she began a new life as she found a new group which accepted her as she was. Therefore she felt more comfortable in her own skin. But the important thing was that she found herself.
In the text writen by Jasmin C. ,, A Shakespear-Prep'' the author deals with the story of a young girl who found herself and began a new life.
The author of the text uses lots of chiasmss - was genau soll das sein?,, i am (line(l) 1.f) and ,,i am (l.2).
In (l.2) she uses a simile, an explicit comparison between two distinctly different things which have at least one feature in common ,, as night and day''.
In the next paragraph she uses an alliteration, a recurrence of initial sounds. The authors aim of the aliterations is to convey images to the audience.
At (l 15-27) the author uses much of chiasms. The effect of this are that she discribes only one person and that this person stands in the center.
ACHTUNG:
du vergisst sehr häufig das 3. Person Einzahl s
auch wechselst du sehr häufig die Geschlechter, zB bei der Autorin Jasmin C - eindeutig eine Frau!
Zudem solltest du nicht allzuviele Vokabeln verwenden, die (und das unterstelle ich dir einfach einmal) deinem eigenen Wortschatz entsprechen.
Jetzt wo ich wieder etwas mehr Zeit habe als am Vormittag, eine gründlichere Antwort. Hoffe du kannst damit mehr anfangen.
In dem Ausgangstext "A Shakespearean Prep" beschreibt die Autorin Jessica C. wie sie Ihre Leidenschaft zum Theater entdeckt hat sowie die Komplikationen in ihrem Freundeskreis die damit einhergingen.
Wenn du einen Englischen Text bearbeiten sollst, oder auf die darin enthaltenen Infos aufbauen musst, würde ich vorschlagen, dass du ihn dir zuerst ins deutsche übersetzt; ich glaube nämlich, dass du ein paar Pasagen nicht ganz richtig verstanden hast.
Sie spricht zuerst über die Vielfalt ihrer Persönlichkeit, im speziellen ihre Lieber zum Theater und zur Schauspielerei, dass sie selbst immer gerne schauspielert. Ihre Freunde konnten ihre Begeisterung aber nicht teilen (dieser zwispalt wird sehr eingängig beschrieben), von manchen hat sie sich sogar entfremdet.
In der High School jedoch trifft sie auf eine kleine Gruppe gleichgesinnter, die ihr auch das Selbstvertrauen geben, wieder zu ihren alten Freunden zurückzukehren.
Nun zu deinem Text.:
(Btw. mein englisch ist sicherlich auch nicht das beste und ich würde auch hier und dort noch einiges umschreiben/neuschreiben, es würde aber auch eigenartig wirken sollte dein text plötzlich dem eines Native Speakers gleichen )
1) What objective facts do you learn about the author's life?
The author describes herself as a person of diverse personality, for examlpe is she the only Mexican she knows who dislikes the mexican food.
She discovered her attitude towards acting during her school time. Some of her friends couldn't understand her love for the theater so she lost contact with many of them.
She loves Shakespeare as she randomly quotes him during car rides or dinner parties.
Her normal friends don't accept that she is a drama queen but because of that behaviour she found new friends who accept her as she is. The author felt more comfortable with her belonging to the new group. They spend their time with girls ''who lunch''.
2.) Outline what she says about her emotional life!
(Hier nur die grammatikalischen Fehler ausgebessert; stilistisch ließe sich hier sicher noch etwas machen)
The author says about her emotional life that she was very lonely as they say that she is a drama queen. Her friends deserted her because she is not a normal girl. Her friends don't accept her theatrical tendencies. She loves Shakespeare. In high-school they began a new life. She found a new group ,they accepted her as she is. She felt more comfortable in her new own skin. But the important thing was that she found himself.
3.)Analyse language and style of the article!
The text that was written by Jasmin C. ,, A Shakespeare-Prep'' is about finding himself and beginning a new life.
The author uses lots of chiasmus ,, i am (line(l) 1.f) and ,,i am (l.2).
In (l.2) they us a similie, an explicit comparisson between two distinctly different things which have at least one feature in common ,, as night and day''. In the next paragraph she uses a alliteration, a recurrence of initial sounds. The author's effect of the aliterations is to convey auditory images.
At (l 15-27) the author uses much of chiasmi. The effect of this is that he describes only one person and that the person stands in center.
Singular chiasmus | Plural chiasmi
Was den Chiasmus betrifft: bist du dir dabei sicher? I am und I am ist zumindest der Definition auf Wikipedia nicht ein Chiasmus.
4.) Literature like Shakespeare's dramas may contribute to your personal development -discuss-!
Shakespeare is one of the first great dramatists. Some of the todays most substantial tragedies were written by Shakespear. Sad for all friends of literature his works didn't survive completly. He was active in all literary genres. Especially his romantic tragedies (Romeo and Julia) and his comedies are very exciting, his stories which take places (king Lear) at the time of Shakespear give an interesting insight into the living conditions of that time - da weiß ich nciht ob ich dich richtig verstanden habe
What really impressed me was how Shakespeare manages it to pack historical facts (the drama king) into great poetry.
In my opinion he is the first writer who is not satisfied with a des*****ion of the unviable people but also the examination of the emotional lives of his characters. was willst du mit diesem Satz sagen?
Shakespeare’s language is strange even for the England of his days but then again the most s*****s we have today are reconstructions based on memories of actors and the audience , but this fact doesn't really want to appear as an excuse in my mind it even lets the Shakespeare ''fans'' who are always quoting his crap - englisch vulgär für Schei**e, unpassend für einen soolchen Text mMnseem rather ridiculous because they actually gabble some words that probably never ever left Shakespeare’s mouth.
He wasn't able to write his name properly and left out the second letter? irgendein substantiv fehlt hier. The excuse for his curiosity still is the instability of the English language that days but I expect move of a winnable genius of language and poetry. - was willst du mit diesem letzten Satz sagen?
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